Post 1606. Thursday September 21
Six Sentence Stories
He tried to crack the brittle topping on his crème brûlée but despite stabbing it with his spoon it refused to yield so he jabbed it with a knife which had the desired effect inasmuch as the topping cracked, but the dish leapt off the table sending a slimy slick of crème across the floor.
Unfortunately, a waiter carrying a tray of drinks was but a step away and despite making a gallant attempt to stay upright, he started slithering and sliding like a drunken skater and the wallbangers, whiskies and wine launched themselves into the air, drenching everybody in an alcoholic shower!
A couple of drink-drenched diners jumped to their feet knocking their table skew-whiff which sent a plate to the ground splattering chef’s 'plat du jour' all around their feet, and the waiter, realising one was losing her balance, tried dashing to save her but although his legs moved like Fred Astaire performing a tap-dance, he made no forward progress whatsoever.
Then it all went into to slow motion as the young lady fell backwards, the waiter fell forwards, both ending up in a tangle of arms and legs in the slop on the ground and as several fellow diners tried to help the hapless couple they too ended up on their derry-aires taking their food with them.
Suddenly one girl grabbed a fistful of fettuccine and rubbed it into her friends face, someone else did the same, and in no time at all, it turned into one hilarious food fight.
A letter to the local paper, presumably from an ex-sailor, suggested the name of the restaurant be changed to the Mess Deck and several other correspondents thought it would be a great idea if they made the food fight a regular event which really does sound like fun doesn't it?
For Six Sentence Stories where this week's cue word is Plate.
A six settings chain reaction! Very clever.ReplyDelete
Thank you PaulDelete
Brilliant... I was in there with all the messy food and precariousness of trays and plates...ReplyDelete
You gave me a laugh on one of my "not so good days" - thanks..
I'm delighted to have done so. Thanks MazDelete
Heeheehee! It could have ended with angry diners, but if they keep their sense of humor and turn it into fun, it's good all around.ReplyDelete
It certainly was fun! Thanks mimi.Delete
Nice way to turn a mishap around.ReplyDelete
That's what I thought! Thanks DeborahDelete
It is indeed a Mess Deck with so much food on places other than just plates. The whole scene played in front of my eyes.ReplyDelete
Hopefuly not literally! Thanks KalpanaDelete
A spectacle worthy of Larry, Moe, and Curly. Well done.ReplyDelete
So it is! Thanks DeniseDelete
Hi Keith - definitely fun ... but horrible to clear up! Mess Deck - good name for a cafe/restaurant ... I could see the mess - a Laurel and Hardy type encounter ...cheers HilaryReplyDelete
Incase you are wondering it wasn't based on events at my restaurant in Eastbourne! Thanks Hilary.Delete
a vivid and engaging action sequence!*ReplyDelete
*no, it's alright to groan, "This clark scottroger doesn't he ever just relax and enjoy the fun for the sake of the fun?"**
** yes, yes I do.***
*** but a large part of the fun of this bloghop is, in addition to enjoying the story-ettes, lies in figuring out how the writer(s) does what they do.
In this case, it seems (upon re-reading) that having vivid objects involved in the sequences helps tie it together "... crack the brittle topping on his crème brûlée but despite stabbing..." "...dish leapt off the table sending a slimy slick..."
but then, you appear to shift from the things to the people, " ...his legs moved like Fred Astaire..." "...young lady fell backwards, the waiter fell forwards, both ending up in a tangle of arms and legs"
Clark, you've spent longer studying my piece than I did whilst writing it! Thank you so much for your analytical comment.Delete
Hollywood writers could borrow this scene. You made it easy to visualize.ReplyDelete
I'm open to offers Kristi! Cheers.Delete
Keith your writing is so visual Loved it I had a similar experience when cutting a stubborn bun it flew onto someone else's table but hadn't quite the spectacular effect as in your story lolReplyDelete
Now that I would love to have seen! Thanks so much Marja.Delete
Fun! Messy, but fun.ReplyDelete
The best kinda' fun! Cheers.Delete
I love it! What a great fun story!ReplyDelete
Thanks Lisa. A bit of fun with writing now and again does you good!Delete