Tuesday, May 03, 2016

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

Posted Tuesday May 3



A lone figure hobbled up the grassy slope towards the edge of the lofty cliff. A pathetic sight; thin, hunched and draped in torn, worn grubby clothes. He dragged behind him a near empty wooden cart, inside it all his worldly possessions. He trudged closer and closer to the edge, then stopped just inches from the sheer drop. Hundreds of feet below frothing waves crashed over jagged rocks, beckoning him, tempting him to join them. He tried to gather what thoughts remained.

As he watched the squawking gulls swooping, diving, he wished that he too had the gift of flight and was able to launch his soul skyward and look down on what he had become, to maybe see where it all  went so terribly wrong.

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Today, atop the cliff sits a wooden cart wheel. That rotting wheel is all that remains of Arthur. Somebody must have brought it up from the rocks below, perhaps someone who knew him once; once upon a happier time.


This  short piece was inspired by Momtheobscure's photograph at Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

28 comments:

  1. Great piece of writing! The images are all so very clear. The story, hauntingly sad! Wonderful story!

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  2. Nice story keith
    I hope to read your Liebester award post someday

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    1. Thanks DeeDee. I'm must take a look back to to award now the Challenge is over.

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  3. it's quite imaginative take on the prompt

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  4. What an enchanting story. Very vivid descriptions. An enjoyable read.

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  5. Nice descriptions of the lone figure and the cart containing all his possessions. Your image makes me feel sorry for him, not to mention when you say all that is left of him is a rotting wheel. He seems like a forgotten person in life, and that is an awful tperson to be in that situation. I can see why he wants to fly away.

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    1. I don't know where the story appeared from, and even less so what led to his tragic demise. Thank you Amanda.

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  6. You do such excellent descriptions of your characters and their situations and this one is no exception, Keith. We can feel his sense of despair, and we are saddened by resulting ending. I always want to be the one to scream "No, wait, don't give up yet!" because I believe that there is always, always a reason to hope.

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    1. I know exactly where you are coming from Josie. But everybody has their own way of dealing with situations and who are e to say they are wrong. Thank you so much for your generous words.

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  7. Wonderfully descriptive! Great tale!

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    1. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my post.

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  8. Wonderful, vivid descriptions that make this sad tale a joy to read. Great job!

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    1. That's very kind of you to say so Sonya

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  9. So nicely done Keith, enjoyed your take and those questions, one does wonder about it all.

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  10. I wonder how many other people stand in that very site and wish that they too could take flight, review and address their errors. Great story!!

    @Samantha/samratkel from
    Shadow Realities

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    1. I live close to an infamous cliff where around 20 people each year take a fatal decision. Many stand and think. Thanks Samantha.

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  11. That was such a lovely, poignant story, Keith.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. That's so kind of you Susan. Thank you.

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    1. This wasn't the easiest story to write since the cliff top walk close to where I live is infamous for such deeds.

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  13. Wonderful write, Keith.. such a sad tale

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  14. Nice descriptions, Keith - 'frothing waves' 'jagged rocks' etc... sad story.. I love how we interpreted this prompt so differently!

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    1. The picture was open to so many interpretations which has what has made reading everyone's posts so interesting.

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