Posted Tuesday May 3
As he watched the squawking gulls swooping, diving, he wished that he too had the gift of flight and was able to launch his soul skyward and look down on what he had become, to maybe see where it all went so terribly wrong.
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Today, atop the cliff sits a wooden cart wheel. That rotting wheel is all that remains of Arthur. Somebody must have brought it up from the rocks below, perhaps someone who knew him once; once upon a happier time.
This short piece was inspired by Momtheobscure's photograph at Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers
Great piece of writing! The images are all so very clear. The story, hauntingly sad! Wonderful story!
ReplyDeleteThanks PJ. I'm glad it worked!
DeleteNice story keith
ReplyDeleteI hope to read your Liebester award post someday
Thanks DeeDee. I'm must take a look back to to award now the Challenge is over.
Deleteit's quite imaginative take on the prompt
ReplyDeleteThanks so much i b.
DeleteWhat an enchanting story. Very vivid descriptions. An enjoyable read.
ReplyDeleteThat's very kind of you Graham
DeleteNice descriptions of the lone figure and the cart containing all his possessions. Your image makes me feel sorry for him, not to mention when you say all that is left of him is a rotting wheel. He seems like a forgotten person in life, and that is an awful tperson to be in that situation. I can see why he wants to fly away.
ReplyDeleteI don't know where the story appeared from, and even less so what led to his tragic demise. Thank you Amanda.
DeleteYou do such excellent descriptions of your characters and their situations and this one is no exception, Keith. We can feel his sense of despair, and we are saddened by resulting ending. I always want to be the one to scream "No, wait, don't give up yet!" because I believe that there is always, always a reason to hope.
ReplyDeleteI know exactly where you are coming from Josie. But everybody has their own way of dealing with situations and who are e to say they are wrong. Thank you so much for your generous words.
DeleteWonderfully descriptive! Great tale!
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking the time to read and comment on my post.
DeleteWonderful, vivid descriptions that make this sad tale a joy to read. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThat's very kind of you to say so Sonya
DeleteSo nicely done Keith, enjoyed your take and those questions, one does wonder about it all.
ReplyDeleteIndeed, Thanks very much Michael
DeleteI wonder how many other people stand in that very site and wish that they too could take flight, review and address their errors. Great story!!
ReplyDelete@Samantha/samratkel from
Shadow Realities
I live close to an infamous cliff where around 20 people each year take a fatal decision. Many stand and think. Thanks Samantha.
DeleteThat was such a lovely, poignant story, Keith.
ReplyDeleteSusan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
That's so kind of you Susan. Thank you.
DeleteThat was beautiful and sad.
ReplyDeleteThis wasn't the easiest story to write since the cliff top walk close to where I live is infamous for such deeds.
DeleteWonderful write, Keith.. such a sad tale
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Ravyne
DeleteNice descriptions, Keith - 'frothing waves' 'jagged rocks' etc... sad story.. I love how we interpreted this prompt so differently!
ReplyDeleteThe picture was open to so many interpretations which has what has made reading everyone's posts so interesting.
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