My first 100 word story for Friday Fictioneer
You think I am mad because I see the old lady and you don’t. There on her balcony. Listen, her rocking chair’s creaking and her knitting needles clicking. Stop laughing at me.
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You think I’m crazy because I see the young girl and
you don’t. There, standing in front of the house. She is shouting. Listen, you
can hear her. Don’t pull that face.
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Hi, I’m John. My fiance’s disappeared. We live
over there. Her name is Mary.
I’m John too. I can’t find my wife. She sits here knitting.
She's called Mary too.
Have we met before?
Word count 100
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OH, interesting! Time travel? Overlapping realities? Ghosts? Very intriguing.
ReplyDeleteIf I were to put in a box I would probably label it 'a little bit of nonsense'! Having said that all three of your suggestions could apply.Thanks for visiting.
DeleteWelcome to Friday Fictioneers, Keith! I had the same thought that Alice (above) had about a parallel universe but I don't know if that's right or not?
ReplyDeleteHi Michael - I'm not sure myself so let's go with your suggestion, parallel universe!
DeleteSomething strange happening here. Dual identities? Time warp? John and Mary and John and Mary? Intriguing. Great first FF. Beware - it's addictive.
ReplyDeleteThanks Patrick. I'm sure it will be addictive once I get my head around the 100 word rule!
DeleteWelcome to FF. Good first effort. I do love a ghost story :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Dawn. I've been writing two or three pieces of flash fiction a week on my blog for eight years now, but usually of the 300-500 word variety! This certainly will be a challenge!
DeleteOh, it most certainly is. Some days they pop right out at 100 words, mostly though mine go to 140-200 and I have to edit from there. It's a good exercise and makes you aware of your vocabulary.
DeleteSplendid.. I like this with overlapping realities of folding of time .. excellent stuff, hope to see more great stories from you here.
ReplyDeleteMany people believe we've been here in a former life. Johns belief was confirmed
DeleteA good start for your entry to FF, Keith.
ReplyDeleteThanks. I'm going to enjoy myself here!
DeleteI'm still trying to figure out if he is crazy. I think maybe so
ReplyDeleteI'm not certain myself and I wrote it!
DeleteDear Keith,
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Friday Fictioneers. As you've already been told, it's addictive. I liken it to the Hotel California. "You can check out anytime you like but you can never leave."
Intriguing story although I'm a bit unclear as to what's happened and who it is in the first two paragraphs seeing the disappeared Mary's.
I look forward to reading more from you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle. I'm looking forward to next week already!
DeleteKeith,
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Friday Fictioneers! And thanks for sharing that weird, loopy little story. It almost felt like two worlds folding into each other.
If you think that's loopy........!
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