Post 1596. Tuesday September 5
Each day she visits me. She’s a wonderful daughter. I changed my will yesterday, I've left her everything. After all, the others don't deserve it. She’s just brought me a glass of warm milk and my tablets. They are a different colour from my usual ones. She said the doctor changed them.
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The old wooden rocking chair creaks as she gently sways him to and fro. His breathing slows, the glass slips from his hand and shatters on the stone parlour floor. He tries to say something, but the slurred words fade as he drifts away.
She won't need to visit anymore. A smile of satisfaction spreads across her face as she turns and walks away.
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Dark! But entirely possible, if there was no fear of law.
ReplyDeleteI'm sure it happens. Thankd Reena
DeleteThis was fantastic, Keith. One moment, I was feeling good about the daughter's love and you go ahead and turn it on it's head. Loved the denouement. Cheers, Varad
ReplyDeleteI'm delighted it worked! Thanks Varad
DeleteI think I mus be twisted because I wondered at her intentions from the start - the kind are always suspicious! Cruel and creepy tale Keith -in a good way of course
ReplyDeleteNot sure what that says about you Lynn!
DeleteEnter the suspicious detective who isn't convinced by the death by natural causes verdict! Two great voices here Keith.
ReplyDeleteMon nom est Hercule Poirot.
DeleteHi Keith - well done - I'm sure it happens ... but we need these snoopy detectives around - and Poirot is certainly one of the best - cheers Hilary
ReplyDeleteHis little grey cells will work it out I'm sure! Thanks Hilary
DeleteOh what a bitter pill to swallow at the bitter end!
ReplyDeleteWasn't it just! Cheers Gregory
DeleteEvil begins at home. A scenario seen too many times in real life. Well done.
ReplyDeleteSadly that's very true Denise,
DeleteOh my goodness, chilling! She waited until he changed his will to give everything to her then knocked him off! Great story Keith!
ReplyDeleteI hope my girls don't read this, it might just give them ideas! Thanks PJ
DeleteOne autopsy later and she's exposed. Oops.
ReplyDelete...depends how well she's covered her tracks! Cheers James
DeleteA glimpse of a future without the elderly? I can see it happening.
ReplyDeleteArlee Bird
Tossing It Out
Not just yet I hope!
DeleteMoney makes the world go round. It is sad that a daughter had to resort to such evil designs.
ReplyDeleteIt does indeed Kalpana
DeleteI'm reassured by the fact that she's so awful at this -- killing him the very next day? oh, that's not suspicious -- that she'll almost certainly get caught. What a terrible person you've drawn there!
ReplyDeleteLikely she will, who know? Cheers Joy.
DeleteSuch a 'Cold- blooded' feel to this.
ReplyDeleteGreat story and so well crafted!
Very kkind of you moon.
DeleteAh what money can do to a person. What a fantastic trilling story your wrote. Loved it
ReplyDelete...the route of all evil. cheers Marja
DeleteThe very familiar faces sometimes do easily hide heinous intentions.
ReplyDeleteGreat tale... hooked till end.
- Anagha From Team MocktailMommies
http://mocktailmommies.blogspot.in/2017/09/remigrating-colours.html
It happens. Thanks Anagha
DeleteDark and eminently readable.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much.
DeleteSent shivers down my spine! Wonderful narration...
ReplyDeleteIn a good way I trust! Thank you.
DeleteVery able written. Just wondering if the change of voice in the second para was an inadvertent error or a deliberate ploy. Great writing, Keith.
ReplyDeleteDeliberate neel. The first para sets out his thoughts which is why I used italics, and the second is an account of what physically happened. Thank you.
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