Tuesday, September 05, 2017

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Post 1596. Tuesday September 5




Each day she visits me. She’s a wonderful daughter.  I changed my will yesterday, I've left her everything. After all, the others don't deserve it. She’s just brought me a glass of warm milk and my tablets. They are a different colour from my usual ones. She said the doctor changed them. 
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The old wooden rocking chair creaks as she gently sways him to and fro. His breathing slows, the glass slips from his hand and shatters on the stone parlour floor. He tries to say something, but the slurred words fade as he drifts away. 

She won't need to visit anymore. A smile of satisfaction spreads across her face as she turns and walks away.

Word count 116

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36 comments:

  1. Dark! But entirely possible, if there was no fear of law.

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  2. This was fantastic, Keith. One moment, I was feeling good about the daughter's love and you go ahead and turn it on it's head. Loved the denouement. Cheers, Varad

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    1. I'm delighted it worked! Thanks Varad

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  3. I think I mus be twisted because I wondered at her intentions from the start - the kind are always suspicious! Cruel and creepy tale Keith -in a good way of course

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    1. Not sure what that says about you Lynn!

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  4. Enter the suspicious detective who isn't convinced by the death by natural causes verdict! Two great voices here Keith.

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  5. Hi Keith - well done - I'm sure it happens ... but we need these snoopy detectives around - and Poirot is certainly one of the best - cheers Hilary

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    1. His little grey cells will work it out I'm sure! Thanks Hilary

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  6. Oh what a bitter pill to swallow at the bitter end!

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  7. Evil begins at home. A scenario seen too many times in real life. Well done.

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  8. Oh my goodness, chilling! She waited until he changed his will to give everything to her then knocked him off! Great story Keith!

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    1. I hope my girls don't read this, it might just give them ideas! Thanks PJ

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  9. One autopsy later and she's exposed. Oops.

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    1. ...depends how well she's covered her tracks! Cheers James

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  10. A glimpse of a future without the elderly? I can see it happening.

    Arlee Bird
    Tossing It Out

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  11. Money makes the world go round. It is sad that a daughter had to resort to such evil designs.

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  12. I'm reassured by the fact that she's so awful at this -- killing him the very next day? oh, that's not suspicious -- that she'll almost certainly get caught. What a terrible person you've drawn there!

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    1. Likely she will, who know? Cheers Joy.

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  13. Such a 'Cold- blooded' feel to this.
    Great story and so well crafted!

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  14. Ah what money can do to a person. What a fantastic trilling story your wrote. Loved it

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    1. ...the route of all evil. cheers Marja

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  15. The very familiar faces sometimes do easily hide heinous intentions.
    Great tale... hooked till end.
    - Anagha From Team MocktailMommies
    http://mocktailmommies.blogspot.in/2017/09/remigrating-colours.html

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  16. Sent shivers down my spine! Wonderful narration...

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  17. Very able written. Just wondering if the change of voice in the second para was an inadvertent error or a deliberate ploy. Great writing, Keith.

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    1. Deliberate neel. The first para sets out his thoughts which is why I used italics, and the second is an account of what physically happened. Thank you.

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