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Tick tock tick tock tick tock. I hurl the clock across the room. Tick tock yes no tick tock.
I rush to the bathroom and douse my face with water. On the shelf, I notice some pills. There is a third way.
Wednesday, August 09, 2017
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Friday Fictioneers
Tick tock tick tock tick tock. I hurl the clock across the room. Tick tock yes no tick tock.
I rush to the bathroom and douse my face with water. On the shelf, I notice some pills. There is a third way.
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I can feel the guilt - I hope he doesn't take the easy way out of his dilemma. Great urgency in this piece Keith.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Iain
DeleteOh God! Nooo!
ReplyDeleteGreat story , Keith!
The easy way out? I'm not sure. Thanks moon
DeleteI love moral dilemmas. Nice one, Keith
ReplyDeleteMe too, but this is one I wouldn't wish to share!
DeleteNo, I wouldn't want to share this dilemma, either. He might take the "easy way" out, but that may never get the other guy off the hook --- unless he left a note saying "I did it, not him."
ReplyDeleteYou've set the scene nicely; we can feel his anguish. CG/SW
That is so true. Even I have no idea which way my character chose. Thanks so much for your comment.
DeleteI guess there's always that, but it will still hurt his family.
ReplyDeleteAt least his secret will di with him.Thanks James
DeleteThere are no soft options between hard places.
ReplyDeleteIndeed there are not Reena
DeleteThose are two very hard places, but maybe the third is even harder. I hope so.
ReplyDeleteWho knows? thanks for dropping by Jane
DeleteHis guilt and pain were very well written. And you leave us wanting more!
ReplyDeleteKind of you to say so. Thanks Linda.
DeleteWonderful tension and guilt here. Whatever he did, it's clear that there's no good answer now.
ReplyDeleteWhich way to turn? Thanks Joy
Deletesleeping pills will definitely help, but he should use in moderation. :)
ReplyDeleteI'll mention it to him but I don't think he'll listen! Cheers plaridel.
DeleteHe really is in a bad spot. The opening paragraph sets the tone so well. Nice piece!
ReplyDeleteIndeed he is. Thanks so much.
DeleteWhat a great preamble to disaster.
ReplyDeleteDisaster in every direction. Thanks Alice.
DeleteYou are right... same title, totally different story!
ReplyDeleteThe tension is palpable and hopefully he doesn't take the easy way out which is by not confronting whatever it is that he has done...
He is unable to think clearly, so who knows what he'll do. Thanks Dale.
DeleteHe may be wrestling with an uncomfortable action of his, but suicide is the worst answer. Evidently he really doesn't feel love for his family or he wouldn't do this to them! Nice story and easy to picture! Awesome!
ReplyDeleteI felt he was confused and unable to think clearly. Thanks for your comment, much appreciated.
DeletePrevention is always better than cure. I'm sure he'd love to hear me rush in the door and quote that aphorism as he's tormented by his actions and what to do next.
ReplyDeleteI enjoy this kind of flash where the reader is left to formulate their own ending. I'd like to see him "be a man" and come forward. While this will bring shame to his family and all those negative consequences, there would also be the honourable upside where he would gain a sense of respect, courage and honour for coming forward and taking his punishment. Not letting an innocent man pay for his crime. If he stays silent now and the truth comes out later, then he'll be needing those pills. The consequences would be far worse.
Well done, Keith.
xx Rowena
Thank you so mucch for your insightful analysis of his dilemma. There would be 'double shame' in owning up - firstly for the crime and secondly for letting someone else take the blame. Quite a dilemma.
DeleteOh dear, the third way's not the best option. Maybe option four - do a runner and make a new start? I could feel his anxiety as he worried over what had happened and what's to come.
ReplyDeleteI'll sugest it to him if it's not too late! Cheers Alistair.
DeleteOh dear, what a dilemma. Whatever he choses, he'll hurt his family. Great writing, very effective.
ReplyDeleteA no-win situation. Thanks for your generous words Ga H
DeletePushed so far by guilt - could be a grim outcome here. Well spun tale Keith
ReplyDeleteI do believe so. Thanks so much Lynn
DeleteVery nicely done! I've spent so many nights not being able to sleep. You captured that feeling so well plus the feeling of guilt.
ReplyDeleteThings of concern seem twice as bad at night, not that his dilemma could get any worse. Thanks Alicia
DeleteThoughts and feelings magnify when you can't sleep. I hope he makes it to the morning.
ReplyDeleteSomething we all experience I imagine. Thanks so much Clare
DeleteI can feel the rock and hard place getting closer together, clamping down to twist his mind.
ReplyDeleteThey are certainly closing in on him. Cheers Russell
DeleteHis guilt is gnawing him and the big question is : to own up or not to? the Sword of Damocles hanging. nice story.
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It certainly is. Thanks Kalpana
DeleteThat third way would leave the family vulnerable too.
ReplyDeleteA no win situation! Thanks liz
DeleteThe guy is a coward, an escapist. Great story, Keith.
ReplyDeleteThat about sums him up Neel!
DeleteDear Keith,
ReplyDeleteNow there's a lose-lose situation. The innocent still carries the blame and guilty man's family suffers still. Good story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
My story's here:
https://rochellewisoff.com/2017/08/09/11-august-2017/
That are no winners here. Thanks so much Rochelle
DeleteThat is a subtle piece. A dilemma well penned.
ReplyDeleteVery kind of you, thanks.
Deletegood take, Keith :) I could feel the tense and the dilemma
ReplyDeleteThank you so much
DeleteOh this is so sad... The dilemma has been captured perfectly. Really wish there was a better way out though :(
ReplyDeleteI fear not. Thanks so much for your comment.
DeleteWell written Keith! The angst and the dilemma comes out really well.
ReplyDeleteNice of you to say so. Thanks Esha
DeleteOmg, I hope he doesn't take his chosen path. Well written Keith, you described his dilemma well.
ReplyDeleteRegards,
kittysverses.wordpress.com
Whilst writing this I felt me might, but who knows, even I don't! Tanks Aishwarya
DeleteGreat take on the image...I want to know what he has done!
ReplyDeleteWhatever it was, it was pretty terrible for sure. Thanks Bettina.
DeleteThat's indeed a hard choice. I know someone who really did take that path. Great take Keith!
ReplyDeleteOh gosh, that must have been awful. Thanks so much for commenting
DeleteGood one, I like stories with an hint, but no reveal.
ReplyDeleteNe too! Thanks so much
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