Friday Fictioneers
They’ll probably end up in the bin though. She accused me of something; said she had proof. But I persuaded her it was nonsense. I felt guilty afterwards. Not for what I did, he deserved it, but for denying it.
So I left flowers on her desk. Her favourites. Well, I could hardly take them to his funeral, could I? Anyway, I’ll be miles away by then.
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"You" better scoot fast if she has the proof.
ReplyDeleteGreat story! Come see mine here.
I'm 'outa here! Thanks Alice
DeleteRevenge on a love rival perhaps? Best not to leave a confession in writing, can't convict you for delivering flowers!
ReplyDeleteThat's what I thought! Thanks Iain
DeleteDear Keith,
ReplyDeleteShe'll know, but will the police? He'd best run fast.
Shalom,
Rochelle
https://rochellewisoff.com/2017/08/02/4-august-2017/
He's not stopping to find out! Thanks Rochelle
DeleteHe will be watching his back for the rest of his life.
ReplyDeleteI'm sure you are right! Thank you mimi
DeleteI love the full circle of this... and he better make himself scarce!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Dale.
DeleteSuperbly written
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Also, I feel the previous layout "Keith's ramblings header" was cleaner
Thanks DeeDee. Re the header - I agree and I have decided to revert o the old one. Thanks for your input!
DeleteHaha! He sounds like a bit of a psycho, it's probably best for her that he's making a run for it :-)
ReplyDeleteThat about sums him up! Thanks Alistair
DeleteA gripping take, he better run fast. Well done, Keith 😀
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Don't worry, he's gone! Cheers Aishwarya
DeleteHahaha! Clever, Keith, very clever.
ReplyDeleteMost kind of you sir - thanks very much.
DeleteIt holds you till the end, and then springs a surprise. The point is, what did he gain? Superb writing!
ReplyDeleteA certain amount of satisfaction I guess. Thanks Reena
DeleteLOL You certainly have a diabolical sense of humor hidden under all that talent! :D
ReplyDeleteSuch flattery! I don't know what to say except thank you of course!
DeleteExcellent take.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much.
DeleteI agree with another commenter: wicked sense of humour---and you must have talent to make readers sympathize with the MC. Are you by chance a lawyer?😉
ReplyDeleteHonestly? No! Cheers Windy One
DeleteOh, what a tangled web! Great story.
ReplyDeleteIndeed! Thanks for dropping by Linda
DeleteThe casual indifference of the narrator makes him more dangerous, cold-blooded as they call it . Great character portrayal and story , Keith.
ReplyDeleteThat will help him get away with it! Thanks so much for your very kind words moon.
DeleteHope he has a different set of IDs handy. Good take Keith. Loved the way the story built towards the ending.
ReplyDeleteSo pleased it worked for you Varad. Your generous words are much appreciated.
DeleteFlowers ain't enough. SEnD Ca$H Or El$e
ReplyDeleteWow, I'm not arguing with you - it's on its way!
DeleteI've met a lot of losers in my day, but fortunately none as diabolical as this guy.
ReplyDeleteWho me? !! Cheers Denise
DeleteNo. Not you. That guy you wrote about. I hope.
DeletePhew, I thought youi'd found me out!
DeleteHa! Nice zinger in the end. You made me laugh, and I'm still smiling. Good one!
ReplyDeleteI'm delighted! Thanks so much.
Deletehopefully, it was all worth it.
ReplyDeleteIndeed! Cheers plaridel
DeleteWow! Great writing! I'm particularly impressed with "Not for what I did, he deserved it, but for denying it." That tells us so much about both men. While the killer is cold-blooded, he feels that his rival deserved punishment; more than that, he feels that the woman would possibly have agreed with him. It's just a brilliant line, because it crams so much in while being psychologically true. Well done indeed!
ReplyDeleteThanks you so much Penny.Comments such as yours are so valuable as they confirm that the story had the desired impact, something we often wonder about.
DeleteHe better run faster than usain Bolt.
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Haha! You are so right! Thanks Kalpana
DeleteGreat take on the prompt. I wonder if he was able to get away with it!
ReplyDeleteWe'll never know!Thanks Shweta
DeleteAh, one from the stalker's point-of-view. I like this. Very crisp. You bring out information bit-by-bit. So clever!
ReplyDeleteKind of yu to say so Sascha
DeleteWicked. :)
ReplyDeleteCheers Sandra
DeleteAwesome. I can't really say it better than some of the comments. So much in so few words. Be well!
ReplyDeleteLess is more, or so they say. Thanks Darla
DeleteI didn't see that ending coming. I love it. Great writing.
ReplyDeleteNice of you to say so Ga H
DeleteOh my.....
ReplyDeleteI couldn't put it better myself! Thanks Dawn
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