Post 1478. Wednesday March 15
Friday Fictioneers
At eleven every night, Earnest wound the clock before climbing into bed with his beloved Mavis. It was a wedding present and in fifty years hadn’t lost a second. One night he said ‘Look after it won't you’. She couldn’t wake him in the morning.
At eleven last night, Mavis wound the clock and adjusted the hands. It started losing time after Earnest went. She touched a finger to her lips, then to its face. ‘See you soon’ she whispered.
This morning her helper noticed the clock had stopped at eleven-o-three. Mavis was in bed, she’d passed away. In her hand was a clock key, on her face a smile.
lovely, Keith
ReplyDeleteI am aren't I? Oh, the story! Thanks neil
DeleteOne cannot live without the other. It is romantic in a way, isn't it? And so often when one goes, the other follows closely behind. Truly lovely, Keith
ReplyDeleteIt happens so often. Thanks Dale
DeleteSome things (and people) come in pairs. And it's too difficult to live with half a heart. I'm glad there was a smile in the end.
ReplyDeleteThey do indeed. She's happy now.
DeleteTouching story Keith.
ReplyDeleteCheers Iain
DeleteDear Keith,
ReplyDeleteTouching if not timely. (someone had to say it.) Truly lovely story, all kidding aside.
Shalom,
Rochelle
https://rochellewisoff.com/2017/03/15/17-march-2017/
Haha!They did indeed. Thanks so much Rochelle
DeleteTouching. Very nice, Keith.
ReplyDeleteThank you Darla
DeleteThis was so sweet and tender, and I wish we all could leave that peacefully, and never be separated from our beloved one too long.
ReplyDeleteIf only. Thanks Josie
DeleteTender love.....
ReplyDeleteIndeed.
DeleteVery touching. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Sandra.
DeleteThey weren't apart for very long. Nice.
ReplyDeleteIndeed they weren't Tresha
DeleteRomantic but a little sad. Great piece!
ReplyDeleteI think I'd label it poignant - partly because I love the word! Much appreciated Alistair
DeleteVery poignant story, but it doesn't really leave me sad. Nicely done.
ReplyDelete...just as I hoped Loré. Thanks for your generous words.
DeleteWonderful, to love someone so much and to pass into the ever-after so close to each other. A most endearing tale, Keith.
ReplyDeleteIt must be wonderful. It does sometimes happen I'm sure.
Deletegreat love story. thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteVery kind. Thanks plaridel
DeleteOh that was so poignant, Keith - thank you!
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...and my thanks to yoi too Susan
DeleteSweet and sad at the same time. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteThat's what I thought. Thanks for dropping by
DeleteAwwww. If you got to go, that's a sweet way to do it.
ReplyDeleteIt certainly is. Thanks so much Alice
DeleteSo poignant, and it can be so true that this happens.
ReplyDeleteIt does. Thanks Lake.
DeleteI'm just going to echo the others:a lovely little bit of storytelling.
ReplyDeleteSo romantic…
ReplyDeleteA beautiful tale of love.
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