Tuesday, February 16, 2016

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

Posted Tuesday February 15


I'm starting this stand-alone piece for FFfAW wth the final few lines from a  piece of flash fiction I wrote for Sunday Photo Fiction last week. 
This week's photo prompt is provided by TJ Paris. Thank you TJ!







'Please join your vehicles' boomed a voice from the loudspeaker. The obedient travellers filed down to the car deck, and one by one drove from the ferry and away into France and beyond.

On the stern deck lay a shattered glass and a bunch of keys. Down below, one car remained.


She'd heard nothing from her twin sister for more than a week. They said she'd chosen to end her life at sea. Yet something told her that she soon was to return home. It was just a feeling, but somehow very real. A sense that only twins are said to often share.

Every day she went down to the beach. Every day she stood and stared out to the horizon. Every day she watched as the tide rolled in then out then in again.

Every day she prayed for her sister's return.


This morning as the sea ebbed away she saw something lying forlorn amid the jagged rocks, the shells and the glistening seaweed.

Her sister had returned.




Word count 168

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7 comments:

  1. Hauntingly sad. She prayed for her sister to return from the sea and her body returned. Wonderful story, but so sad.

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  2. Very sad but superbly crafted story��

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  3. Sad one Keith. I thought her sister returning would be a good thing but it is scary to have only her corpse return.

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  4. So sad and tragic but beautifully written. I had a tiny bit of hope with the twin's feeling until the very end.

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  5. Sad but with a sense of closure. Wonderfully written! Oh, and I really like how you continued it from your last story! :)

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  6. You've done it again, given me chills. You make such poetry out of fictional characters' final moments. :) Well done.

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