Wednesday, April 29, 2015

You.......







Let me read it to you. Just click the green arrow.




You didn't ask. You just walked into my mind, an uninvited guest. 

Until then my life was ordered, regulated. I was content.

For reasons I will never understand I stood aside and let you change everything, things which until then I’d felt comfortable with. 

You rearranged my thoughts, my memories, my hopes, my ambitions. I was no longer my own person, you took over. I looked on as you invaded my very being.

Then as suddenly as you arrived, you walked back out leaving a trail of destruction in your wake.

Why oh why did I allow you to occupy my mind?



Picture: The Devil Inside by Sophia Violette at deviantART


My final story will be a tale about Alphabet Land called Those Naughty Z's

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20 comments:

  1. It's hard to believe we are up to Y already!

    Yvonne

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  2. sometimes people just take over and occupy our thoughts!

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  3. A strong piece. Probably better for the character to be free.

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  4. the story brings back the memory of a friend, he died in a road accident in 1978, we were friends for about seven years and i had allowed him to occupy my mind

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    1. You must have had very mixed emotions at the time.

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  5. Such tragedy is way too common. Thank you for sharing. I'm still on a gardening topic at http://darlamsands.blogspot.com/ for the letter Y. And I am number 1179 on the list today as it looks like lots of participants continue dropping off, unfortunately.

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    1. It certainly is as I know only too well.

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  6. When I read this, I thought of two things: Obsession over a person and someone who emotionally abuses you then leaves.
    Very strong, visual piece. As always!

    www.heathermccubbin.blogspot.com

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  7. Like Heather, I'm seeing an obsession, on both sides.

    Annalisa, writing A-Z vignettes, at Wake Up, Eat, Write, Sleep

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    1. This is based personal experience and although it was somewhat one sided there was an element of what you felt.

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  8. I feel like the protagonist knew on some level what was happening, and yet, they were powerless to stop it. Very strong writing, well done!

    Rachel Pattinson
    Rachel's Ramblings - full of writing, tea and cake

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  9. Quite an unsettling piece. Strong writing.

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    1. It wasn't easy to write. Never mind, its comedy for my finale tomorrow!

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  10. it's sad then people leave like that. Well written.

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  11. Can relate to this one. Very beautifully written, Keith :)

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