“Don’t shout at me like that Daniel.
I said don’t shout at me!
No I didn’t meet him Daniel.
I told you I did not meet him. How many more times do I have to say it?
Daniel, I’m not lying. It’s no good going on and on at me. I’m not listening to you any more.
Don’t shove me. I’ve warned you. Get your hands off me now Daniel. I’m not going to tell you again.
How dare you hit me you bastard!
See how you like it”.
See how you like it”.
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"Oh God Daniel, I'm sorry.
Daniel, speak to me, don't just lie there.
Dan, it's not funny. Open your eyes.
Dan
Dan
Daaaaan”
Picture: Anonymous from Google Images edited by Keith Hillman on Ribbet
Tomorrows piece will be a very short and poignant a tale of our times. It's called No name, just a number.
Picture: Anonymous from Google Images edited by Keith Hillman on Ribbet
Tomorrows piece will be a very short and poignant a tale of our times. It's called No name, just a number.
hopefully she'll get a not-guilty due to self defense! You write good short stories! Fun to read them!
ReplyDeleteI wonder! Thanks for dropping by Kathe. It's 2am here and I didn't expect any visitors so soon after posting it - you made me jump!
Deletequite a melee with unexpected ending. ( the first "to" in the post should read "do'"please correct)
ReplyDeleteDuly corrected! Thanks for visiting.
DeleteOh wow! I bet she didn't see that happening when she gave him a hit.
ReplyDeletebetty
He didn't, and to make it worse she broke her favourite vase!
DeleteThat got way out of hand! Yeah, he pushed her too far. I like the word "melee".
ReplyDeleteI've always liked that word and it's the first time I've found a use for it!
DeleteOh, that escalated quickly. I hope Dan isn't dead!
ReplyDeleteTasha
Tasha's Thinkings | Wittegen Press | FB3X (AC)
Me too!
DeleteOh oh! That got nasty fast. Says how much built up tension was already there. Well done. Good luck with the Challenge!
ReplyDeleteVisiting from Untethered Realms
So true! Thanks for dropping by.
DeleteGreat use of dialogue - a lot of tension, and a great twist!
ReplyDeleteAnnalisa, writing A-Z vignettes, at Wake Up, Eat, Write, Sleep
Thanks Annalisa
DeleteThat's very intense and emotional. Good job!
ReplyDeleteGlad it had the desired effect! Thanks M!
DeleteOoh, another chiller. You weren't kidding. ~grin~ Best wishes! Oh, and my blog is number 1271 on the A to Z list today.
ReplyDeleteThanks so so much!
DeleteOh My God! The scenario changed pretty quickly! Great twist! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks once again Shilpa
DeleteWonderful tension in dialogue, I can really feel her panic at the end.
ReplyDeleteI panicked writing it!
DeleteWow! A story only in dialogues. I've tried this, but flopped.
ReplyDeleteWow! A story only in dialogues. I've tried this, but flopped.
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