Tuesday, November 21, 2017

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Post 1640. Tuesday November 21

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers





We used to love sitting here watching the setting sun, didn’t we? I remember one day we had a trivial conversation along the lines of ‘how’s work, how’s your mum, what did you have for lunch, you need a haircut... will you marry me?’ You should have seen your face. You had a fit of giggles and said ‘no!’ Then you looked me in the eye and said ‘of course I’ll marry you’

Then your sun set, too soon. Why? I blamed myself. I blamed your family, I blamed the doctors, I blamed God. How dare he? I was angry, so angry. But it was nobody’s fault. These things happen. To some. To you.

That was a long time ago, and here I am watching the setting sun again, just as we used to. The bench is still here; it's a bit weather-worn and wobbly, a bit like me. That oak tree’s still over there. It doesn’t look a day older, unlike me! There’s one thing missing. You are missing. You.





Word count 169


Thank you Priceless Joy for hosting and Footy and Feedy for the photo (I love a bit of alliteration!)

24 comments:

  1. Lovely piece of real life tragedy and love Keith.

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  2. How truly beautiful true love is!
    Beautifully written.

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  3. Such a lovely yet heart touching story! So very sad that she died. :( Beautiful!

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    1. All good things come to an end. You seem to have tken most of us down this route this wek PJ!

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  4. So sad. My Dad died in April and my Mom still misses him terribly. I fear she always will.

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    1. I'm so sorry James. It must feel like half of yourself has disappeared.

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  5. Beautiful. So full of love and acceptance.

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  6. A whole life in a few sentences. Beautiful!

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  7. Poignant. Beautifully narrated.

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  8. Memories don't die. A part of the other person lives within us.

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  9. this is so beautiful Keith .. a true love story. The narration made me cry

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    1. I can't thank you enough for your lovely words Akshata

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  10. What a lovely story. So sad, because it could easily be a true story for any of us.

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    1. Indeed it could. Thanks so much for reading my piece and commenting.

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  11. a touching tale, Keith :)

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  12. What a beautiful story of a lifelong love. I really enjoyed that, Keith.

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