Post 1617. Tuesday October 17
I should have seen the writing on the wall. He’s no good they said. Look what he did to her they said. That was their own fault said I. He loves me. How wrong I was.
You’re safe now they said. A safe house, he can’t trouble you now. But they lied. They bloody lied because he’s here. I can see him through the crack in the closet doors. He's over there, see? There, wandering to and fro, fro and to, a crowbar clenched in his white-knuckled fist. He’s going from one room to another, up the stairs and down again. Room to room, room to room, this way and that, that way and...this. My heart is beating, he’s getting closer, my heart is throbbing, he's snarling, I’m dizzy, he’s reaching for the door, I’m..I’m..I’m….
It’s a safe house they said. You're safe now they lied.
This week's photo is by Gant-Sud.
Wow! This was creepy. I half expect him to rip a hole in the door snarling, 'Here's Johnny'. Brilliantly done, KeithReplyDelete
The Shining - now that really was scary! Cheers Varad.Delete
Hi Keith - regrettably true for too many people, especially kids ... so well written - excellent ... cheers HilaryReplyDelete
That's most kind of you Hilary, thank you.Delete
So scary. There is no safe space from someone like this, i've lost friends because there was no safe space.ReplyDelete
How sad. I'm really sorry mimi.Delete
That is cleverly crafted and the stench of treason is quite overpowering.ReplyDelete
I'm pleaed it had the desired effect! Cheres YSDelete
Well that's depressing. I was hoping she was hallucinating or overwhelmed with an irrational fear. Shelters for battered women and children are supposed to be safe and shield the victims from their abuser.ReplyDelete
We would like to think so James. Thank you.Delete
Terrifying stuff, Keith. Great drama.ReplyDelete
Praise indeed coming from you Iain! Thank you so muchDelete
Wow! Chilling story! Very gripping! It is really sad when the safe house is no longer safe. Great story Keith!ReplyDelete
That's really nice of you to say so and very much appreciated PJ. Thamk you.Delete
The build up of fear has been painted well. Hallucination or real - it has the same impact on the body and mind.ReplyDelete
Thanks for reading and commenting Reena.Delete
The fear etched in the story managed to scare me and wished no-one should be in such a bad position.ReplyDelete
When he reaches for the door, his cell-phone should ring and he leaves the room and forgets his vendetta.
I sincerely hope so Kalpana! Thank you.Delete
Mmmm! Hope I didn't scare you!Delete
I am so sure that whoever took this picture had a totally different experience with this place, but all us writers have corrupted it.ReplyDelete
Absolutely. Cheers Dobson.Delete
Stuff that nightmares are made of! Excellent description!ReplyDelete
Thanks so much Shweta.Delete
Oh man, that's terrifying! Love the way you handed the details little by little. And the repeated phrases just ratcheted up the tension. Well done!ReplyDelete
I'm delighted it worked as intended! Thanks so much EADelete
Felt like watching a horror movie. Eerie one Keith!ReplyDelete
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Only thing missing is the popcorn! Thanks Anagha.Delete
Sadly sometimes the evils of humanity outweigh any offers of safety. Sad tale.ReplyDelete
Well put Nora. Thanks very much.Delete