Post 1608. Tuesday September 26
Blake is a successful private detective. His wife Jane and his kids are used to him rarely being home. Today he is employed by a woman who suspects her husband is having an affair.
Eighteen fifty-eight. Blake is in Starbucks. He watches his mark drink a latte then stand, and leave. Blake scribbles some notes in his book. 'Nineteen o-seven, Market Street walking east'. He dons his sunglasses and trilby hat, turns up his collar and follows at a discreet distance.
His mark enters a store then exits with a bouquet of flowers. 'Nineteen twelve, 7/11 Store. Flowers' Blake notes. A nineteen twenty-two the mark turns into Juniper Avenue. 'Interesting' thinks Blake. 'I live in Juniper Avenue' The mark walks to number thirty-two and knocks.
Jane opens the door, takes the flowers and kisses the mark. Blake's children excitedly tug on his jacket.
'Nineteen thirty-two. 32 Juniper Avenue. I had no idea', he writes in his book. There was no way he could have. After all, he’s rarely home.
Eighteen fifty-eight. Blake is in Starbucks. He watches his mark drink a latte then stand, and leave. Blake scribbles some notes in his book. 'Nineteen o-seven, Market Street walking east'. He dons his sunglasses and trilby hat, turns up his collar and follows at a discreet distance.
His mark enters a store then exits with a bouquet of flowers. 'Nineteen twelve, 7/11 Store. Flowers' Blake notes. A nineteen twenty-two the mark turns into Juniper Avenue. 'Interesting' thinks Blake. 'I live in Juniper Avenue' The mark walks to number thirty-two and knocks.
Jane opens the door, takes the flowers and kisses the mark. Blake's children excitedly tug on his jacket.
'Nineteen thirty-two. 32 Juniper Avenue. I had no idea', he writes in his book. There was no way he could have. After all, he’s rarely home.
Word count 165
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Oh dear, he should've hired someone to keep an eye on his own wife! Good story Keith. I got a little confused with the time, it seemed to jump backwards and forwards a bit, but enjoyed nonetheless.
ReplyDeleteYou've no idea how much times I changed the time whilst writing this and still l got it wrong! I've corrected it now - I think! Cheers Iain.
DeleteOh yikes.
ReplyDeleteI quite agree! Thanks James
DeleteWell done Keith ... fascinatingly written - and how does it occur - well perhaps used to ... but who knows ... clever - cheers Hilary
ReplyDeletePleased you liked it Hilary.
DeleteSomehow I saw this coming, but then I read way too many detective novels. Well done.
ReplyDeleteClearly you do Denise!
DeleteHahahahaha! The "Mark" is having an affair with his wife. Great story!
ReplyDeleteGlad you like it PJ!
DeleteToo clever for me keith His mark means what he writes? and his mark is him?
ReplyDeleteLove the they way you wrote it
Usually, mark means 'target' or 'the person being tailed' in detective parlance.
DeleteThanks Marja - I trust Varad's comment has carified it for you!
DeleteOops. Poor Blake. Great write...very enjoyable.
ReplyDeleteAt least he solved the case! Cheers Sheena
DeleteHahahaa! This was fantastic, Keith. Blake has been quite clueless for a detective.
ReplyDeleteIt's easy to miss something that's right under your nose! Thanks Varad
DeleteOh dear. What a homecoming. The case of the duped detective.
ReplyDeleteThat would have been the perfect title! Thanks Lavanya
DeleteExcellent build-up to the climax!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Reena
DeleteOuch! What a way to find out. Love the way you slowly ratcheted up the tension.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it EA. Thank you.
DeleteVery clever take. Quite ingenious.
ReplyDeleteKind of you, thanks YS.
DeleteWhile the cat's away ... the mice will find a new cat! Nicely doen Keith
ReplyDeleteHehe! I like that, and the new cat got the cream!
DeleteWorld is a small place! He got "run out" on his home pitch!
ReplyDeleteI loved this circle of life twist!!!
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Glad you liked it Anagha. Thank you.
DeleteGood one Keith, lovely twist to it..
ReplyDeleteThanks Michael
DeleteOops...he should have kept a close watch at home first
ReplyDeleteAmazing read
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