Tuesday, September 26, 2017

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Post 1608. Tuesday September 26



Blake is a successful private detective. His wife Jane and his kids are used to him rarely being home. Today he is employed by a woman who suspects her husband is having an affair.

Eighteen fifty-eight. Blake is in Starbucks. He watches his mark drink a latte then stand, and leave. Blake scribbles some notes in his book. 'Nineteen o-seven, Market Street walking east'. He dons his sunglasses and trilby hat, turns up his collar and follows at a discreet distance.

His mark enters a store then exits with a bouquet of flowers. 'Nineteen twelve, 7/11 Store. Flowers' Blake notes. A nineteen twenty-two the mark turns into Juniper Avenue. 'Interesting' thinks Blake. 'I live in Juniper Avenue'  The mark walks to number thirty-two and knocks.

Jane opens the door, takes the flowers and kisses the mark. Blake's children excitedly tug on his jacket.

'Nineteen thirty-two. 32 Juniper Avenue. I had no idea', he writes in his book. There was no way he could have. After all, he’s rarely home.


Word count 165

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33 comments:

  1. Oh dear, he should've hired someone to keep an eye on his own wife! Good story Keith. I got a little confused with the time, it seemed to jump backwards and forwards a bit, but enjoyed nonetheless.

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    1. You've no idea how much times I changed the time whilst writing this and still l got it wrong! I've corrected it now - I think! Cheers Iain.

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  2. Well done Keith ... fascinatingly written - and how does it occur - well perhaps used to ... but who knows ... clever - cheers Hilary

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  3. Somehow I saw this coming, but then I read way too many detective novels. Well done.

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  4. Hahahahaha! The "Mark" is having an affair with his wife. Great story!

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  5. Too clever for me keith His mark means what he writes? and his mark is him?
    Love the they way you wrote it

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    1. Usually, mark means 'target' or 'the person being tailed' in detective parlance.

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    2. Thanks Marja - I trust Varad's comment has carified it for you!

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  6. Oops. Poor Blake. Great write...very enjoyable.

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    1. At least he solved the case! Cheers Sheena

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  7. Hahahaa! This was fantastic, Keith. Blake has been quite clueless for a detective.

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    1. It's easy to miss something that's right under your nose! Thanks Varad

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  8. Oh dear. What a homecoming. The case of the duped detective.

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    1. That would have been the perfect title! Thanks Lavanya

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  9. Excellent build-up to the climax!

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  10. Ouch! What a way to find out. Love the way you slowly ratcheted up the tension.

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  11. Very clever take. Quite ingenious.

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  12. While the cat's away ... the mice will find a new cat! Nicely doen Keith

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    1. Hehe! I like that, and the new cat got the cream!

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  13. World is a small place! He got "run out" on his home pitch!
    I loved this circle of life twist!!!
    -Anagha From Team MocktailMommies
    http://mocktailmommies.blogspot.in/2017/09/dark-bitter-but-not-so-cool.html?m=1

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  14. Good one Keith, lovely twist to it..

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  15. Oops...he should have kept a close watch at home first
    Amazing read

    Click Here to see what Mrs. Dash Says

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