Tuesday, September 19, 2017

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 Post 1604. Tuesday September 19

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers



I drive into the blackness leaving the dazzling lights of the city behind. Why is the road so empty? I should be almost home by now, but I’m not. Where am I? Did I miss a turning? I’ll turn around, yes, that’s what I’ll do. Go back and start again.

I’ve been driving for ages. I should be back in the city by now. But I’m not. Where am I?

My engine just spluttered. It’s stopping, I’m stopping. Oh no, the petrol gauge says empty. But I filled up before I left. How can it be? I’ll have to walk. Where's my torch? It should be in here. Where is it? It's gone.

Where am I? It is so dark. I can’t hear my footsteps? Where’s the moon gone? Why’s it so quiet? Why so still? I’m cold. I am so cold.

Is there anybody there? Please, help me. Where am I? Where am I...?




Word count 156


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24 comments:

  1. Sounds like one of my bad dreams. Oh no, I'm falling....

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  2. Either an analogy for death, a horrible nightmare or the start of a chilling sci-fi. All would be a fit. Nice writing as always Keith.

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  3. He's dead. On the other hand, I was reminded of the opening sequence to an old TV show called "The Invaders" (1967-68):

    The invaders: alien beings from a dying planet. Their destination: the Earth. Their purpose: to make it their world.

    It began with a closed, deserted diner, and a man too long without sleep to continue his journey. It began with the landing of a craft from another galaxy...Now, David Vincent knows that the invaders are here. That they have taken human form. Somehow he must convince a disbelieving world that the nightmare has already begun…

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    1. My, you have a great memory! Now you come to mention it I do see certain similarities. Thanks James

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  4. Chilling story! I could relate to part of it because I have been lost driving too, but the ending is so frightening! Great story!

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    1. I hope you had a happier ending to your journey PJ!

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  5. Chilling, it could be a dream , a nightmare. Wanted to know more clearly the end of the well-written mysterious story, Keith.

    https://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/09/the-night.html

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    1. Even I'm not sure Kalpana and I wrote it! I enjoy leaving my readers in the dark - literally in this piece!

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  6. Hi Keith - not something I'd like to be doing ... losing one's way or not knowing where the road goes to ... turning around isn't really an option ... certainly chilled me - though it's morning ... cheers Hilary

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    1. Better wrap yourself in a blanket Hilary. I'd hate to think I'd given you a cold!

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  7. I read the end of life. Hope modern civilizations have helpline numbers to reach out.

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  8. Is that a NDE... near death experience? or Is he returning from the far off galaxy only to find the cold vibes dwelling in the darkness??
    So many possibilities...loved it!!!
    - Anagha From Team MocktailMommies

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    1. Read into it whatever you will! Thanks so much Anagha

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  9. Start running! And don't stop- no matter what!!

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  10. Although it's clear what is happening in your story, it also reminds me of when I flew into Nova Scotia and got a brand new rental agent for my car hire. It took her two hours to get through the line and by the time I drove away in a too-fancy car that I couldn't understand, it was 10 at night and pitch black. I didn't know where to plug in the GPS I'd bought specifically for this trip, didn't understand any of the controls, had no map and no idea where I was headed. I got on the divided highway and headed north with no idea of where I was. In the end, I phoned a friend in Missouri and he functioned as my GPS until I got to my motel two hours later. But....until I thought of that solution, I felt exactly as described in your piece.

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    1. I can't imagine what that must be like. Even writing my fictional piece gave me the shivers! Thanks so much for your comment.

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  11. Completely chilling. Sounds like one of my horror dreams

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    1. I did actually wake up during the night with this tale running around my mind! Thanks Lavanya

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