Friday, October 28, 2016

Friday Fictioneers

Posted Friday October 28


This morning I had a shadow. Yes, you. We played chase after breakfast. The faster I ran the quicker you went. You remember. Don’t you?

That bridge. The one over the river? You came and went as we ran. Coming and going. It was fun, wasn’t it? Then when we got this side you disappeared. Abandoned me. You did. And I thought you were my friend.

I hate you.

Where are you? I’m standing in the sunshine. Look.  Don’t mess with me. That tree has a shadow. I know you’re here. Somewhere.

I don’t like it here. Can we go home? Take me home. Please?

Please?

Thank you Rochelle at Friday Fictioneers for  hosting and Peter Abbey  for your inspirational photo.









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22 comments:

  1. plaridel28 Oct 2016, 03:19:00

    i think he has gone into the light where no shadows can exist.

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  2. Marja28 Oct 2016, 05:44:00

    haha he sounds very desperate Lost and lonely Maybe the shadow is just hiding on the backside

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  3. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields28 Oct 2016, 13:01:00

    Dear Keith,

    Perhaps he needs to get out more. Shadows are fickle things.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle
    https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2016/10/26/28-october-2016/

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    1. Keith's Ramblings29 Oct 2016, 16:51:00

      They are indeed. Here today and gone to morrow - if it's cloudy!

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  4. Sandra Crook28 Oct 2016, 13:32:00

    How very disturbing. The voice was quite plaintive. Well done.

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    1. Keith's Ramblings29 Oct 2016, 16:52:00

      Than you Sandra. That was just what I was aiming for.

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  5. Clare Hempstead28 Oct 2016, 15:42:00

    Definitely lost and lonely. Nicely done.

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  6. Josie Two Shoes28 Oct 2016, 18:37:00

    This sounds like the shadow may be his only friend, perhaps he will learn soon that it returns as soon as he has stepped away from the sunshine. But sunshine can be a good friend too!

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  7. Michelle Ivana Yunaska Theilfing Obama28 Oct 2016, 20:53:00

    excellent.

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  8. Susan A Eames28 Oct 2016, 22:50:00

    Interesting, clever and disturbing story, Keith.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  9. Dale29 Oct 2016, 05:12:00

    Oh my... he needs a real friend...

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  10. Alicia31 Oct 2016, 03:13:00

    I agree with Sandra. This is very disturbing. In a good way. Leaves the reader with a feeling of loss or longing ... Well done.

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    1. Keith's Ramblings31 Oct 2016, 10:05:00

      I'm pleased it had the desired effect, no matter how disturbing it might be!

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  11. Gah Learner1 Nov 2016, 20:39:00

    The bridge doesn't seem to be what it appears to be, or where has he gone to have lost his shadow? This has a sad, slightly desperate feeling. I also like the design. :)

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