Monday, January 14, 2008

Writers Island - Treasure part 2

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‘Let’s play pirates’ said John to Jack
‘Let’s pretend the garden's an island.
Let’s look for treasure,
there’s bound to be some.
Let’s get a spade and a sack’

'Twelve steps forward and two steps right.
Look for a bush and hide'.
‘We have to be quiet,
don’t make a noise.
Look out for something that's bright’.

‘Watch out - a tiger’ says Jack to John
Cat stops and stares then walks off
‘I see a parrot
there in the hedge’
A gull flapped its wings and was gone.

Crawling round on their hands and their knees
They look for a probable spot
‘This is the place
I know that it is’
Hidden by bushes and trees.

They made a big hole, and burrowed and dug
And pulled out the stuff that they found.
Rusty old nails
A bit of a plate
A handle that fell off a mug.

‘When dad sees this mess he won’t be pleased.
He’ll make us walk the plank.
‘cos yesterday
he planted seeds
and now we’ve dug them up!
For Treasure part 1 click here!

24 comments:

  1. heh...heh...now this does bring an image of my two boys at the beach...they dug up so many treasures that i had to leave some behind...

    i loved this...keith...another one for the yet to be published collection ;)

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  2. haha.. i am still laughing.. this was sooo cute!! Sounds like something my son would do..
    That was a wonderful take on the topic.. I loved the spirit the pace and the story in the poem!! Lovely!!!

    The Treasure

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  3. LOL I love this post very much and I can see that these kids treasures are right there with them in their imaginations and not to mention Dad's garden. Great piece.

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  4. just came back to say that i so could not believe when you said that you never read till you were 40...well, all i can say, finally there is hope for my husband! :)

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  5. Oh kids are living in such an adventure word. You cptured that treasure very well. Happy to read your treasures again. Hop quickly to part 1

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  6. Very well said, Keith!!!!!
    Great little work of art!

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  7. I know those boys - but they are midddle aged men now. Thank you for your visit Keith and I hope you can find your way back.
    Pat

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  8. Ohmigosh! What fun this is! A big smile - full of treasure, it is!

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  9. So much fun reading this - and the photo is adorable. Your post is a treasure!

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  10. I enjoyed reading this - especially the last verse.

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  11. haha!! that is soo cute and funny! Totally brought back my 3 monkeys always playing dress up, always digging into something they shouldn't!
    Children and their imaginations... Certainly treasures. :))

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  12. heh heh! Lovely!! Reminded me of R.L.Stevenson's poems.

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  13. Oh what a lovely treasure this poem is ... I found myself smiling from ear to ear as my mind filled up with happy childhood memories

    Thank you for that
    Fenny

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  14. Adorable, I could see this read as a
    bedtime story with lovely illustrations! It was magical, with a giggle at the end!

    Hugs Sherrie

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  15. heh hehe....so perfect....boys day out !! Am still giggling thinking of the kids at work on their treasure....

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  16. Very nice...oh to be young and carefree again..sure makes me want to be a child :)

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  17. Nice one Keith, that takes me back to my dressing up days - I'm still smiling now!

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  18. That was a fun story. I need to go read part 1.

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  19. Children are treasures and your poem proves that. Reminds me of those two rascals of mine.

    S

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  20. that was good...made me laugh...the pic definitely enhanced your poem..being a garden i would be very upset too!!!

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