Friday, January 18, 2008

Sunday Scribblings followed by (Friday) Fiction


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This week on Sunday Scribblings we've been invited to write about 'fellow travelers'. This is what I've come up with.
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Off to the jungle!
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Little Max climbed up onto a stool and reached for the biscuit tin. He felt inside then took out a chocolate covered wafer and another round one covered in hundreds and thousands. He carefully placed them inside a plastic bag and put them in his pocket ready for the journey.


Max was heading for the jungle. There were dangerous animals there so he would need a big stick to fend them off. He opened the door of the garden shed and looked around for a something suitable . Some were too long, others to fat. But this one was just perfect.



He’d need a hat too. Up in the corner he saw a green cap with a big peak. That would do. He stood on tiptoes, wobbled a bit, and then just managed to knock it off its hook with his stick. It was a bit big but it was better than nothing.

He remembered hearing something about rain in forests. He’d need his boots to keep his feet dry. And in case it was hot he’d better take that paper fan that Mummy bought back from Spain last year. And that little torch that lives in the cupboard under the stairs for when the sun goes down.

All he needed now were some fellow travellers. Sophie was a bit too grown up and she always laughed at him when he planned his adventures. But Jack was only five and he would really enjoy himself. So he dragged him away from his Lego train and told him not to tell a soul about the fun to come.

Darrus the Dalmatian would enjoy it too. Max went to get his lead and Darrus started bouncing round in circles because he was so excited.

He wanted one more traveller. Edward the teddy hadn’t been out the house for ages. He would love to come.

They were ready for the trek into the jungle. Max wasn’t sure which way it was, but it was probably somewhere near the bottom of the garden. There were some trees on the other side of the fence and it always looked dark and mysterious over there. Jack pulled one way, and Darrus another, but Max tugged them down the garden path.

Suddenly Daddy called from the window - ‘Off on one of your jaunts again Max?’


‘We are going exploring in the jungle’ Max said.


‘I thought we would all go to play on the swings and get an ice cream’ said Daddy.


Suddenly all thoughts of a trip to the jungle were forgotten!

29 comments:

  1. Icecream and swings and playing in the park I would forget the jungle for a few moments too.

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  2. what a true imagination...that'exactly how kids think...another gem for the children's collection, keith...

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  3. Ah you can become a children's writer Great story. I would too change the jungle for an icecream though.

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  4. This is a story children would love and which adults would enjoy reading to them - even for the tenth request of "Read it again, Mommy/Daddy"

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  5. Keith you should write a Children's Book of Short Stories.
    Yes, you are that good.

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  6. This possesses innocent charm!

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  7. My kids haven't played jungle explorer before. I'll have to suggest it to them in the morning. They enjoy play pretending - school, Little House on the Prairie,Bonanza,neighborhood, Survivor, and the latest Santa Clause 2.

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  8. Aaaaaaw...that was such a precious journey....and i'm sure any kids would do a round about on hearing ice creams and swings....

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  9. Excellently done. Great take this week.

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  10. Oh, that is absolutely lovely.

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  11. Absolutely beautiful, you've captured the joy and the innocence, Thank YOU and well done!

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  12. Oh, well done, Keith! Great story for child and adult!

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  13. Wow- you are very good!

    I've added you to the Blogaholics Anonymous blogroll. Welcome to the club ;)
    Livin' With Me

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  14. You need to start getting these beautiful stories published. They are truly wonderful, and Keith, you really have a talent for painting pictures in people's minds!
    Take care
    Tory

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  15. Beautiful story, I was there as another fellow traveler. Well done.

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  16. Lovely story... what an uncomplicated life children have!!! I love the way Max chose his fellow travelers!!

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  17. Cute story. Thanks for the lovely card, it arrived while I was on my travels x

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  18. I want to go to the jungle too... as soon as Max fell in the cookies... I knew it was going to be a great story!!!

    Dee
    http://pavinganewroad.wordpress.com/

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  19. Nicely done! You are an amazing story teller.

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  20. Delightful story and cute visual Kieth.

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  21. Haha! Ice cream often trumps just about anything... And I'm so jealous that you got to live in France! Good luck with your plans to return.

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  22. Keith,
    Delightful!
    We can alwyas explore the jungle but how often do we get to share Icecream with dad?
    ;)
    rel

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  23. You have a knack for children's stories. I like where the prompt led you. It didn't inspire me, but I'm enjoying reading everyone else's take. Great job!

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  24. I could see it playing out in cartoon form on my mind's screen.
    You definitely should submit some of your stories.
    Wish I could go on a little trek through the jungle myself today - it's freezing in New York!

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  25. You definitely have an gift conveying children's stories. Adorable, so visually appealing! Very well done!

    Hugs Sherrie

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  26. what a lovely story...adventures it is important to start as early as you can...now ice cream always comes first...

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  27. I'm glad he left Sophie behind... older, know-it-all's are not any fun.

    as an ex-elementary librarian, I'd say you have something here...

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