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One of this weeks prompts on Writers Island is The Gamble
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It would be a gamble. It was finely balanced. Either it would produce the required result or it would all go horribly wrong.
Time was on my side, so there was no need to make a quick decision. That could end in disaster. No, the best way would be to take my time and try to minimise the risk.
I decided to leave it alone for a while. Maybe have a glass of wine. But then again that could have a negative influence my judgement. I was thirsty, but under the circumstances it would be more sensible to down a glass of water.
When I returned nothing had changed. It was a little warmer, but that wasn’t a bad thing. There was still that smell in the air which had now intensified. Everything looked the same as before, and I didn’t know what to do for the best.
There was nothing else for it. In a few minutes time this place would be teeming with people and I would be the centre of attention. It was now or never. I plunged in. It was then I made my decision.
I would risk adding another splash of my red hot chilli sauce.
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Up in the sky
Over the clouds
Flying high
Swooping up
Shooting down
Spinning fast
Round and round
Out of this world
Passing the moon
Circling Saturn
Whistling a tune
Peering down
The earth so bright
One side dark
The other light
Out of this world
Up in the sky
Over the clouds
Flying high.
30 comments:
It is so hard sometimes to make decisions, even if to add more red hot chilli sauce!
Am I invited?!
Hot sauce, indeed! You had me fooled for a while. Your poem invites a suitable tune to go with it. It's definitely song material.
You had the train de-railed at the last moment. Ha ha ha...well done! I love it.
clever. i like stories/poems that have a punch on the concluding lines.
its worth the gamble :-)
heh..heh...chilli sauce/ i certainly didn't see that coming but from past experience was waiting for some kind of twist but chilli sauce...nah..i didn't see that...:)
the poem is so racy ..i wonder how itmay sound with a tune to go with it? shd i get my boys to try...? i'm tempted...:D
Chilli sauce sure spiced up the suspense. I would never have dreamed of this Keith.
Loved the poem....so sharp and precise. But so expressive
Oh the chili sauce made me laugh!
I enjoyed the poem - I could see it all....
Keith,
I didn't expect anything like that coming.
Your indecision gave this piece an interesting topping ~ you save the spice for last and it worked.
I wish you well.
~ Jeques
The chili sauce made "The gamble" red hot and "Torrid" too!! :)
Specially loved the poem "Out of the World" ..it has this delightful sense of motion to it .
I sometimes wonder which is best - throw yourself into something, or deliberate.
I think the former - or maybe ...
Your gamble reminded me of someone else who has the innate ability to make simple decisions appear very difficult....
I really enjoyed your poem Out of this world, Keith. An asteroid? A comet? A meteor(ite)? or you?
Is it a bird, is it a plane, no it's me!
Great ending - you really strung that one along perfectly. Never saw it coming.
There is no substitute for good drugs. Nice verse.
Whodathunk? An extra dash of chili sauce? Whodathunk? LOL And I love the poem - it sounds so RLS.
An EXTRA dash? I thought you were in the British Isles somewhere, and if you leaned over the pot and whispered, "chili," it would be too much. (Not so with a martini, where a "whisper" of vermouth would be just that.) segue: in my salad days we would call too much of every substance available "skating on the rings of Saturn."
Lots of laughs in this post - thanks.
I enjoyed both pieces. The first one had a great surprise ending. The second was so lighthearted. Great post!
what a delightful "out of this world" poem!
And I like your "geeting video". God bless you too.
i'm there...
WDS
Nice twist with the chili! I'm thinking, what difficult decision is he trying to make? :D
i am thinking the first was a recipe that you were in quandary over.... and a little spark never hurts!!! and the poem was playful and delicious as well!!!!
I love the way the rhythm of this poem matches the words!
Keith.. I look forward to reading whatever you have to offer! You can never go wrong with more hot sauce AND always opt for the red wine! :)
Yes, one needs to think long and hard about adding another dash!
Kieth,
A little wine, some spicey sauce, and a spin around the strarosphere? Gosh, what more could a fella ask for?
pleasant read.
rel
Hey there I would love to try the spicey sauce.
oh that so captures the chili contest... what fun it would be to travel the skies...
hehe...
i like using the name of the poem in my poems, too!
[I hope this isn't a double comment)
To jump or not to jump... *g* neat twist with this poem. I like the way you captured the indecisiveness.
Keith very clever saucy piece! Your scribble Poem read like a minuet! Wonderful work!
Hugs Sherrie
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